Zuko poems

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Well i made a really awesome poem( well i think)
and i really wont to see how people express theirselfs with this, so make a poem about zukos life,zukos sister(azula), maybe about his love for mai?

I dont know how you think about zuko but this is my poem.

The solor eclips coming by
nowere to hide
loosing my power
im getting all sweaty, i need to take a shower
the moon is turning black
all i need now is to wait
for the early moon to shine brightly apone all of the fire peoples face
then i will redeem myself to my forgiving father
but why do i bother?
He was the one i hated, the one who banneshed me
i will never forget
but now i will give him my loyalty
i hope he will welcome me to the fire nation


I think thats good but i wont to see what you think